Actual Date 17/01/2012
I have worries about the Photographer idea, mainly down to the story. I think there is definitely potential in it but as it stands at the moment the story has to victory for the photographer or no lesson to be learnt.
I analysed our story according to the below model of the hero’s/main character’s journey.
What I realised is that there it’s not really a story at all. In 3 minutes we need to summarise the plot and what we have done here is just open it up. It doesn’t make sense and if it doesn’t make sense then we have totally missed the aim we set ourselves.
What I thought would make it clearer is the following:
Rather than him not knowing the cameras power, he visits a small shop (like the film “Gremlins”) and is warned of the power it holds. This way when it all falls apart and his girlfriend winds up dead, it’s his own fault and he isn’t just being punished for nothing, giving the story a moral/lesson and an ending.
Spoke about this on our Facebook group and Will agreed, so if the others also agree we will have to try and write this idea into the existing script.
Meanwhile, I am currently pursuing the idea conceived during the “name 30 film titles that don’t already exist” task.
Our idea was “Love in a Phone Box” and although we never said that Rom Com was a route we would take, as a story that has a clear beginning, middle and end I believe that, even as an opening paragraph, it had (in some ways) more potential that the Photographer idea.
So on Monday 16th-Thursday 19th Jan, to prove that I wasn’t just being an inconvenience to the group by having my doubts, we agreed that Pete, Will and Danny would consider ways to make the original idea as clear as day. I however said I would get a story for “Love in a Phone Box” written out, to show that we could take it somewhere and it would be better as a narrative.